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November 6, 2025
Nazmuz Shaad

Kathleen - Day 2 - siblings - before and after

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SCENE – FIRST MEETING - BEFORE

LIANA

What the fuck it was going to be so easy I just adjust I didn't expect to have all these emotions come bubbling up again I didn't expect to view her as my mother and not my enemy I didn't I have got to sort through all this take a breath keep walking keep walking keep up the pace that's it just breathe just breathe that's it deep breaths and release I'm in the park I love this place I've missed Central Park I have missed the joy of this anonymity that is provided here this is truly wonderful… ohh my look at what's running towards me… ohh I'm such a dirty old woman… isn't he a beauty hmm very nice then go say hello well he's running take your time just enjoy the view smile not that's a girl that a girl that a girl that was very nice…..

JD

OK I've got to get these puppets done for the show I've got a month and I'm not the director, ohh forget the director, I've read the script I know what it's about I know where I think the puppets could really really um contradict the action that's what I want them to do I want them to…I wonder I wonder if the writer OK so just put my thoughts down do the drawings um do I want them scary? I'm not sure if I want them scary, oh I hate running on concrete oh God I should have gone to the track this morning but it's too beautiful. I love being in the park. what if…what if the puppets are are um um broken in some way you know like one arm doesn't work or one side of the face oh I like that - one side of the face doesn't work um and no AI on this one, that was before, this one is really the opposite of what is going on and can I inhale, oh who's that girl coming towards me? isn't that…who is that woman? I know you, don't you dare, keep going keep going JD keep going breathe keep going keep going keep going. I can't OK she's passed OK that bitch, she's not getting away not this time.

JD

Liana. Liana stop!

Liana stops abruptly.

LIANA

My head just exploded did I really hear what WHO I think I heard? could it be possible? could it be possible OK just stand still for a moment. Breathe. I can't, I have no air there's no air

Liana slowly turns around.

JD

It is you

LIANA

Yes and it's you. Hi JD

JD

You, don't come closer.

LIANA

I'm going to. I saw mom. You'd get a kick out of the way we met.

JD

You, you saw mom. she didn't tell me I don't know what to say to you - you God-damn bitch. Oh. Why? Where? Where?

LIANA – STRANGE TRANSITION – HE IS TALKING NOW AND SHE IS TALKING HISTORY

I thought mom would tell you

LIANA

She did. She told me every day for a while. Whenever I needed to know she told me. She never lied to me. You are a liar.

LIANA

No JD, I'm not. I'm your sister and I love you.

JD

Could you possibly be more cruel? do you know anything about me?

LIANA

Yes - from the web. We've all become web creatures and

Liana takes a step towards JD

LIANA cont’s

oh what tangled webs we've weaved when we practice to deceive….

JD

Don't, don't come closer. I'm not sure about what I might do and right now I think I have to return to running…

LIANA

JD, wait, talk with me. JD how do I find you?...

JD runs in the direction he came from; angry tears stream down his face.

Liana is stunned.

SCENE - LATER THAT NIGHT

Liana paces in her living room.

JD works on a deformed puppet very aggressively, not his usual style. He reaches for the cell phone automatically. Liana hears him.

LIANA

Stop. don’t hang up.

Hears no click and breathing.

LIANA

We have got to talk.

Pause

JD

So talk.

LIANA

I was thrown today in the park. I had just met our mother and then I hear your voice shouting at me --

JD

--This is boring, say something I care about.

LIANA

I’m sorry, I’m so sorry

Pause

JD

Yeah, me too. This is done.--

LIANA

--NO it isn’t. I need to see you

JD

Not a chance happening --

LIANA

--That’s not a choice for you --

JD

Funny how that used to work. So long.--

LIANA

--I love you.

Long pause but no click. Lianna tightly clutches the cell phone.

JD

When? Where?

SCENE – FIRST MEETING - AFTER

LIANA (STREAM OF CONSCIOUSNESS – SOC)

What the fuck it was going to be so easy...not my mother, my enemy, not my mother my enemy...breathe walk, that's it deep breaths and release...I love Central Park...my refuge...anonymity...wonderful… ohh my, what do my eyes behold… such a dirty old woman… he’s a beauty... hmm say hello?...just enjoy the view...smile...that was very nice…..

JD - SOC

Puppets done for the show...I've got a month...I'm not the director, oh forget the director...I've read the script I know what it's about I know where I think the puppets could really really um contradict the action that's what I want them to do I want them to…I wonder I wonder if the writer...OK so just put my thoughts down do the drawings um do I want them scary? I'm not sure if I want them scary...I hate running on concrete... should have gone to the track but needed the Park. What if…what if the puppets are are um um broken in some way you know like one arm doesn't work or one side of the face oh I like that - one side of the face doesn't work um and no AI on this one...inhale, oh who's who is that woman?...always the older ones. I know you, don't you dare, keep going keep going...OK she's passed OK, that bitch, she's not getting away not this time.

JD stops and shouts out to Liana’s back.

JD

Liana. Liana!

Liana stops abruptly.

LIANA (SOC)

My head just exploded did I really hear who I think I heard? could it be possible? could it be possible OK just stand still for a moment. Breathe. I can't, I have no air there's no air

Liana slowly turns around.

JD

It is you.

Pause

LIANA

Yes and it's you. Hi JD.

JD

You, don't come closer.

LIANA

I'm going to. I saw mom. You'd get a kick out of the way we met.

JD

You, you saw mom. she didn't tell me I don't know what to say to you - you God-damn bitch. Oh. Why? Where? Where?

LIANA –

I thought mom would tell you --

LIANA

-She did. She told me every day for a while. Whenever I needed to know she told me. She never lied to me. You are a liar.

LIANA

No JD, I'm not. I'm your sister.

JD

You’ve lost that one. You know nothing about me.

LIANA

Yes - from the web. We've all become web creatures and

Liana takes a step towards JD

LIANA contd

oh what tangled webs we've weaved when we practice to deceive….

JD

Don't, don't come closer. I'm not sure about what I might do right now. I think I have to return to running…

LIANA

JD, wait, talk with me. JD how do I find you?...

JD runs in the direction he came from; angry tears stream down his face.

Liana is stunned.

SCENE - LATER THAT NIGHT

Liana paces in her living room.

JD works on a deformed puppet very aggressively, not his usual style. He reaches for the cell phone automatically. Liana hears him.

LIANA

Stop. don’t hang up.

Hears no click and breathing.

LIANA

We have got to talk.

Pause

JD

So talk.

LIANA

I was thrown today in the park. I had just come from a meeting with mother and then I hear your voice shouting at me --

JD

--This is boring, say something I care about.

LIANA

I’m sorry, I’m so sorry

Pause

JD

Yeah, me too. This is done.--

LIANA

--NO it isn’t. I need to see you

JD

Not happening --

LIANA

--That’s not a choice for you --

JD

Funny how that used to work. So long.--

LIANA

--I love you.

Long pause but no click. Lianna tightly clutches the cell phone.

JD

When? Where?

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